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唐韵八期诗班第十六讲A组作业帖 |
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念起一垂钓,江寒水上翁。青山多倒影,碧水共江风。记得江湖路,奔波前后躬。老来求静养,书里一生穷。
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不错,感情真挚。注意锤炼词句,稍作修改会是佳作!
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单句看不错,整体看不知所云。
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