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唐韵诗院十一期律诗班修远组第一讲作业贴 |
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没看到趣啊?
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结句乱絮愁情来的突兀
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首句和后面三句关联不紧密,后三句可以是春天的余寒,可以是深秋。万能句子
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银粟,琼花,玉蝶都是雪的别称。物象重复,没有宕开。切忌步步相逢。
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